I loved it. It was a great read and I'm not much for constructive criticism cuz the stuff I didn't like its just your style and its necessary. But I don't recall anything I didn't like- nice descriptions and they don't drag out, and if they did it was engaging. I look forward for Chapter 2
im a half demon i broke loose from hell and have turned on my corruptors, can take a mostly human form but i will always have my horns(see my signature?), plus they are helpful in combat. we fight the same cause, and thats why i think my character has potential in this novel*still sounding overly optimistic*.
im a half demon i broke loose from hell and have turned on my corruptors, can take a mostly human form but i will always have my horns(see my signature?), plus they are helpful in combat. we fight the same cause, and thats why i think my character has potential in this novel*still sounding overly optimistic*.
Well, I'm gonna fix that with the powers invested in me. We can't a half-demon fighting alongside us, you may get sliced in accident. I'll think about it.
look at my avatar im a white demon(not too many white demons in diablo) except the big frozen beast bastards in the frozen river. and when im not in combat i look normal (except the horns)
it might work if you were like say Illidan, or the PC from Baldur's Gate, i.e in that you possess a form of metamorphasis, you can, if you so choose, become a demon for an extended period of time.
i dont think it would work if you were demon all the time, we are humans fighting demons. (well most of us)
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-Humankind cannot gain anything without first giving something in return. To obtain, something of equal value must be lost. That is alchemy's First Law of Equivalent Exchange. In those days, we really believed that to be the world's one, and only, truth.
Special attack - Summon Vampragon (self explanatory), Multiple Dreams (Multiple darkness hits and energy drain), heal (heal wounds) {can only be used once a day}
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''May the Gods give you the strength and power to bear the madness which flows through our minds.''
''Zubin, I've always imagined you as a crazy raver. The kinda guy that spends all night dancing to trance music while waving glow sticks and popping ecstasy.'' - Murderface
Lack of interest somewhat pushed this project into Hiatus. It is still going, just not as hard as it was before, other commitments and real life are a constant drain of time spend on it.
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-Humankind cannot gain anything without first giving something in return. To obtain, something of equal value must be lost. That is alchemy's First Law of Equivalent Exchange. In those days, we really believed that to be the world's one, and only, truth.
This is primarily Carloseus' project. My role is more like that of an Executive Producer or Consultant, and opposed to a writer. So if you wish to work on it, I'd approach him.
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-Humankind cannot gain anything without first giving something in return. To obtain, something of equal value must be lost. That is alchemy's First Law of Equivalent Exchange. In those days, we really believed that to be the world's one, and only, truth.
I lost all of Chapter 3, so I have been putting it back together in my head as well as forming the entire story in general. My time is usually limited on the computer due to the need of other to use it, or sometimes i got too much to do on here that I can't get to it.
I've altered the oringinal intended plots alot, and they will have references to stuff that actually happen in the novel. The plots themselves I've also adapted alot, I've got alot of the timelines in my head pretty good and all that other mumbo jumbo. I just want you all to know that it is in the works, and once i get some good time to write it all down it will come swiftly. Stay tuned!!
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Fuck you, I'm a dragon.
Ditto, It kept me reading till the end, and nothing distracted me.
Well, I'm gonna fix that with the powers invested in me. We can't a half-demon fighting alongside us, you may get sliced in accident. I'll think about it.
Fuck you, I'm a dragon.
i dont think it would work if you were demon all the time, we are humans fighting demons. (well most of us)
Fuck you, I'm a dragon.
So I look something like this.
Weapon - Slayer Darklaw
Armor - Vampire slayer robe
Special attack - Summon Vampragon (self explanatory), Multiple Dreams (Multiple darkness hits and energy drain), heal (heal wounds) {can only be used once a day}
''Zubin, I've always imagined you as a crazy raver. The kinda guy that spends all night dancing to trance music while waving glow sticks and popping ecstasy.'' - Murderface
Oh and if the Legion of the Damned get pulled into this here's my appearance:
or this
Weapons:
Shuriken
Dagger
A rapier
I've altered the oringinal intended plots alot, and they will have references to stuff that actually happen in the novel. The plots themselves I've also adapted alot, I've got alot of the timelines in my head pretty good and all that other mumbo jumbo. I just want you all to know that it is in the works, and once i get some good time to write it all down it will come swiftly. Stay tuned!!