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    posted a message on come read this
    So post more of the story, I have no problem being proven wrong. I would go back to which part I was referring to, however you erased it.

    Juicybones originally tried to give you advice, "well, it sounds more like flaming to me" was your reply. Just an example how poorly you take suggestions or criticizm.

    I just feel that anyone here could sit down, start writing a fantasy based story, and come up with something just as good. If you know it would be torn to shreds in the professonal world WTF IS SO GOD DAMN OFFENSIVE ABOUT WHAT I SAID? Yes carlo, it would be torn to shreds, shitted on, used for recycled paper so kindegarteners can color on. At age 17 NO ONE EXPECTS YOU TO WRITE PERFECTLY.

    You posted it on the forum so people COULD READ IT AND VOICE THEIR OPINION. That's exactly what I just did, if you need to go buy a box of tissues and contemplate suicide because OH DEAR GOD someone thought it was just "OK", be my guest.

    Stop using the word "FLAMING", typing it isn't going to make your writing -more- creative.
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    posted a message on come read this
    Quote from "juicy_bones" »
    Carloseus, i liked reading your story. and from the looks of it so did alot of other people. there was like 10 compliments before wootstick. that means your story was 10/11! there are always going to be obnoxious flamers and you just have to deal with them. whether or not you end up posting your story on the internet, know that your intro was well written and you should continue to write it.

    How ignorant of you. Nothing I said could even be considered a flame. I rarely ever see any degrade someones art on a forum. Even the shittiest of the shittest. People still pointed out things they liked about it. Carlo you obviously can't take opinions very well, perhaps it's just a immaturity issue.

    Yes, as someone pointed out, the only opinion that really matters is your own. Since you posted it on a public forum I assumed you wanted all the diablo3 lovers to gather around and compliment you left and right. Well sorry to tell you, someone might find not appreciate it 100%. So far you've had two people you felt were cricizing your work, both times you raged back out completely immaturely.

    All I'm saying is it's a nice little read for a couple pages, you would be great at short stories im sure. If you reach more than 20 pages I think you would have a problem trying to keep the reader engaged.

    btw- I actually felt diablo2 was incredibly complex and creative. Just an opinion though.
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    posted a message on come read this
    Constructive criticism is just meant to help, not abolish your self-esteem. You obviously have the ability to write, and give the reader an image. If you wanted to write a story on such a large scope, in my opinion, just need to work on the -creativity- factor. As phrozen pointed out, if writing that kind of conceptual story intrigues you, then write about whatever inspires you. I didn't write a New York's Best Seller so my opinion isn't set in stone. Just as a reader, who read your story so far, just felt a few things needed to be worked on if you wanted to take your story writing to a higher level.

    PhrozenDragon - Well said.
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    posted a message on Sony Playstation 3 Thread
    Do you guys realize that buying a blu-ray dvd player alone costs $800? Sony provides a dozen other attractive features for a whopping $500-$600. To fully utilize the graphics on the ps3 you'll have to buy a tv capable of 1080p, which I have. When blu-ray dvd's and 1080p's get rolling in a couple years you'll be thankful you invested in a CHEAP playstation3.

    WII is good if you enjoy pratically gamecube graphics and all of the cute Mario games.

    I
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    posted a message on come read this
    The whole idea seems a bit cliche. Little to no creativity in my opinion. Nice imagery in the introduction. Introductions have to be catchy though, after your paragraph about the bees observing the land and what not, then the interesting radar flatlines. Then you describe a really cliche world with the regions etc etc. Nintendo rpgs contained that kind of stuff 15 years ago.

    Examples: R.A. Salvatore in the dark elf trilogy describes a underground world where the women are the dominate ones. There is a heirarchy of ranks among all of the dark elves, etc etc. CATCHY.

    Orson Scott Card in Ender's Shadow starts with a homeless child, who's brilliant, he creates a brilliant introduction with the kid analyzing the ranking structure of all the other homeless group of kids, through wit manipulates the situation allowing him eat and survive. CATCHY.

    Some sentences I felt were a bit over the edge, I'm much too lazy to point them out. If you care to hear which parts I suppose I could.

    Anyone can throw descriptive words left and right hoping to accomplish forming a picture with depth to it. I think real writing comes in creativity, there honestly isn't alot of it here.
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    posted a message on Diablo III proof of existance!
    Thassador - Yeah I actually think diablo3.com has established those articles if I remember correctly? Not sure. I'm personally 100% sure diablo3 will eventually be released.
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    posted a message on WHAT game should we play until diablo 3 ccomes out?
    How about this one:
    A daughter goes to her fathers funeral and meets this guy. This guy is incredible, she instantly falls in love with him. When they parted she realized she never got his address or number. She murders her sister the next day. What was her motive?
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    posted a message on WHAT game should we play until diablo 3 ccomes out?
    I went on like a 3 month "FREE MMORPG" search a while back. None of them could compare to blizzard games though. Just to list off a few of them -
    Flyff
    Maple Story
    anything from www.gamengame.com
    Errr I forgot the rest. Was just trying to pass the time, I sort of miss that old addiction I had to diablo2. I tried out WoW til about level 40 and got so tired of how repetitious it was. Then I tried Guild Wars - unfortunately at the time I had a bad impression of the game because of my dial up connection speed - my 256mb of ram - 1.8 proccesor speed.

    I just waste time on starcraft now.
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    posted a message on Come Play StarCraft
    I just went into Clan Exil... Alot of idle people..
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    posted a message on Diablo III proof of existance!
    The only hole that Elfen pointed out yet that I'm not aware of is, Why is www.diablo3.com a fan site? Was this domain purchased instantly after diablo2 came out? Has blizzard attempted to get it? Those I wont argue with.
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    posted a message on Diablo3
    Quote from name="dub Lucifer" »
    when this game comes out,
    re phrase...
    The day this game comes out is the day my life begins and ends! Literally
    Diablo 2 was just so addicting..
    I'd still be playing today had Blizzard not closed my 5+year account for a very very very poor reason (don't ask)
    ( I was honestly thinking of taking them to court for destroying my life that day) here it is over 2 years later and I still miss my d2 account more than my dead dog that just died 4 months ago...seriously... DOES ANY1 FIND THAT CREEPY OR IS THIS FRANCHISE JUST FRIGGEN SICK!
    Diablo3 Better live up to the hype.. I need that feeling back.. DONT SCREW ME BLIZZ. ps. online poker is full of colluding vampires, donkies, rookies and Bullshiot!

    The interesting thing about your posts is that you're convinced that people are actually interested in how much time and effort you've put into the game. I think we can all agree the words "who cares" comes to mind when reading this.
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    posted a message on Im Still Mad
    Quote from name="dub Lucifer" »
    Ok, my account was closed.. over 2 years ago... I still miss it... Everyday.:(
    I never cheated, only used a maphack. I watched poeple hack others account's, steal their items, dupe them...NO PUNSIHMENT.I Built my account up from 1.07. I had E bugged coh, several lev 90+ chars, perfect griffons,413%ebotd zerk's things that made other people druel on the screen... I remember 1.09 when everything was all hex's.. which i had over 200 of both kind! Then 1.10 hit and I lost alomst everyting, ( a raven spiral and a soj) to which I built my godly chars. This was a game that I LOVED playing and did so for about 4 years. ( u might remember my chars US-WEST "dub-Lucifer" "Tony-Montana" I had so many items in 1.11 that were not possible to have unless you were a GOD! I honestly could have sold my d2 LOD account to some nerd for hundreds of dollars... seriously, I had even just beaten the UBER clones by myself and got my Barb torch ( which was -----insanly---- hard ) sickening how much of my life I had invested into this game... Maybe it's a good thing they closed my account, I can actually go out and live life again I cant w8 for D3 tho..! lol

    I just wasted a minute of my life reading this. What does this teach you? Don't use maphack? Good.
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