interesting, but you need to add 1 or 2 lines to the end, something that will draw the reader's attention and make them want to read further. so far all you have is:
but time flows like a river and history repeats itself
this doesn't peak my interest at all. you need to write something thats gonna make people think, wow I wonder what is going to happen. maybe describe this new threat in a vague sense but with enough substance there that will make people want to read more.
just my 2 cents.
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this doesn't peak my interest at all. you need to write something thats gonna make people think, wow I wonder what is going to happen. maybe describe this new threat in a vague sense but with enough substance there that will make people want to read more.
just my 2 cents.