Good intro. It helps set the story/setting/mood without givng anything away. Great character development. Your intro reminds me of a dark comedy-esque feel where you watch the main character getting ready for a solid 5 minutes as you watch just how much he hates his life with every step he makes.
My only critique is that I assume you are purposely writing it in present tense. However, there are a few times you switch to past tense.
Great work and keep it up.
BTW, do you want me to move this to "other" fan fic section?
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I look forward to reading some more.
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My only critique is that I assume you are purposely writing it in present tense. However, there are a few times you switch to past tense.
Great work and keep it up.
BTW, do you want me to move this to "other" fan fic section?
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